Characteristics of madness
Posted by ronrage9 | Posted in | Posted on 12:08 AM
Let me dissolve
With this wind
Thwarts are too many
But not as many as sins
My eccentric revolution
Was I really me?
Or a false being within?
I let go
The bits of papers
Let them fly with the gust
Neither I have no choice
Nor I have an ironic gun
My eccentric revolution
Making me read
The unattributed passages
The words hitting
Faster then bullets
Precarious verbs, I read unperturbed
Was it me,
Or the soul flying,
Lying over that stream of falls
My eccentric revolution
I carry the mystic satchel
Replete with my true self
Untamed, free spirited soul
Confined within perceptions
Like a vividly colourless tree of desire
Floating in an acid bath
Burnt muscles and frail limbs
Unusual pigments in the leaves
My eccentric revolution
Chilling unjust, heaving melodies
Of my voyage to the never land
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hmm..."thwarts are too many"
usage of thwarts as a noun?..na?
"neither i have no choice"..uve got to couple that with a nor to give it a good frame of reference..or say.."either i have no choice"
lots of oxymorons..which are nice..but mujhe lag ra hai..ure not focussing on one particular emotion..ure wanting to use far too many words..not all of which are packing the right punch..
sorry..hope im not "confining u within a perception"
just an observation!
al d emotions i tried2 potray are in relation to one prob.........
i wil tryn keep zat in mind nxt time......thanku di....n no u aint confining me!!.....:P
thanx again!!
Nice expression but may be not properly designed in the frame that's why it doesn't really gives a very clear picture of what you want to convey. As it your baby so you understand it quite well but we people fail to relate!
seriously nice expressions! philosophy wise quite intense!
gud luck!
whoa...really liked it!